When looking for a flawed ad I knew this would be my pick. There were two major flaws I noticed. The first was the incorporation of too many words and the second was the unnecessary sex appeal of the teacher. To fix these flaws I decided to condense the info to just the website link, the short mention of prizes and a short sentence. Also, I decided to eliminate the overly sexualized teacher. I figured that everyone would not consider her attractive so she's not beneficial to the overall ad. Instead of sex appeal I opted for simplistic humor with a pun on five hour energy and Einstein's equation which solves for energy.

art director & tennis freak